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Edmondston-Alston House
- ... that General P. T. Beauregard watched from the Edmondston-Alston House (pictured) the bombardment of Fort Sumter he had ordered, that started the American Civil War?
- ALT1 ... that the Edmondston-Alston House (pictured) was where General P. T. Beauregard watched the start of the American Civil War, with the bombardment of Fort Sumter that he ordered?
- Reviewed: SITI: An Iconic Exhibition of Dato’ Siti Nurhaliza
- Comment: Could this article be first in queue with the picture. Thanks!
Created by Doug Coldwell (talk). Self nominated at 13:11, 20 June 2014 (UTC).
- 16px New enough. Long enough. NPOV. Checking available online resources found no close paraphrasing or copyvios. Hook is well-cited. All paras have cites. Photo is suitably licensed for front page. QPQ done. Hook wording seems a little awkward, so I've propsed an ALT1 that might be a bit better, although I'm not entirely happy with it. Edwardx (talk) 22:17, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
- ALT1 looks good to me. Thanks for review. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:53, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
- Suggested shortening and grammar tweak of ALT1:
- ALT2: ... that General P. T. Beauregard watched the bombardment of Fort Sumter, which he had ordered, from the Edmondston-Alston House (pictured)?
- Yoninah (talk) 23:02, 22 June 2014 (UTC)
- Suggesting a tweak of the tweak:
- ALT3: ... that after ordering the bombardment of Fort Sumter, General P. T. Beauregard watched the attack from the Edmondston-Alston House (pictured)?
- EEng (talk)
- Suggesting a tweak of the tweak:
- ALT4: ... that after ordering the bombardment of Fort Sumter that started the American Civil War, General P. T. Beauregard watched the attack from the Edmondston-Alston House (pictured)?--Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:36, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
