Template:Did you know nominations/Fergie Aitken

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Fergie Aitken

5x expanded by Kosack (talk). Self-nominated at 14:14, 5 September 2018 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Overall I think this is a quality article with good sourcing. It meets the expansion and length requirements. It is neutral and generally free of content problems with one small exception: I think "the record fee that Bury had received for a player" should be rephrased. It is the same phrasing as the source and I don't think the WP:LIMITED exception applies. Otherwise, the article content is good.
  • The hook is good but I think it could be made punchier if it included the actual amount of the fee. Also, if there's room, could it include the team he was transferred to? (No big if it can't but it might be of interest). Nominator's QPQ is handled.
  • Template:U, ping me when you've had a chance to have a look at this and I'll come back :) ♠PMC(talk) 17:18, 28 September 2018 (UTC)
Template:Re Thanks for the review, I've added the fee and other team involved and tweaked the wording. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 17:28, 28 September 2018 (UTC)
The hook is good but the article itself still has that phrasing. Could you change it, and then we'll be good to go? ♠PMC(talk) 14:47, 29 September 2018 (UTC)
Template:Re Done. Kosack (talk) 15:12, 29 September 2018 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg Ready to roll with the original hook! ♠PMC(talk) 15:38, 29 September 2018 (UTC)