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Revision as of 20:19, 16 November 2013 by imported>PFHLai (ALT1 is okay to me, but I'd suggest replacing [1] "terminated after" with "ended with", and [2] <nowiki>"Polish throne" with "throne"</nowiki>. ..... I'm inclined to reject the article on WP:DYKRN#R3. Can more be added?)
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Greater Poland Civil War
... that the Greater Poland Civil War led to the succession of the Polish throne by the ten-years old Jadwiga of Poland?
- Reviewed: Tomás Menéndez Márquez
- Comment: If anyone can work out the bloodiness or the fact that that neither of the principal combatants won into a new hook be bold.
Created by Piotrus (talk). Self nominated at 09:30, 25 October 2013 (UTC).
The article was created yesterday, is long enough and the prose and references fall within policy. However, why is Jadwiga of Poland given the title of King when she was a female? The hook is interesting, although it should be altered to... that the Greater Poland Civil War led to the succession of the Polish throne by the ten-year old Jadwiga of Poland?
- If you want me to work the above facts above into the hook, I suggest,
... that neither of the principal combatants won the bloody Greater Poland Civil War, and that the war led to the succession of the Polish throne by the ten-year old Jadwiga of Poland?--Sp33dyphil ©hatontributions 09:08, 26 October 2013 (UTC)- Thanks for the alt, if it's not too long I like it. Now, the sources clearly note that she was crowned a king, not a queen. Why - interesting question, through I haven't seen the answer to it anywhere, nor is it necessary for the article to discuss, I think. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 14:31, 27 October 2013 (UTC)
- If you want me to work the above facts above into the hook, I suggest,
- ALT1 ... that neither of the principal combatants won the bloody Greater Poland Civil War which terminated after the accession of ten-year old Jadwiga of Poland to the Polish throne? Template:Unsigned
- I am fine with the alt1 hook but an independent reviewer will be needed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 13:52, 10 November 2013 (UTC)
I don't think another reviewer is needed. Length, newness and inline cited hook are fine so going with ALT1. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:22, 10 November 2013 (UTC)
Per WP:DYKSG#H2: "You're not allowed to approve your own hook or article." Independent reviewer is needed for ALT1. BlueMoonset (talk) 05:05, 11 November 2013 (UTC)
- ALT1 is okay to me, but I'd suggest replacing [1] "terminated after" with "ended with", and [2] "[[Polish throne]]" with "[[List of Polish monarchs|throne]]".
- The article, however, is somewhat lacking. One would expect an article about a civil war to have some info on the fighting, something like "who and who in the Grzymała clan leading army X battling who and who in the Nałęcz clan leading army Y somewhere (near present-day, _____, Germany) in whatever month, 1383...", etc. The first paragraph in the section "The civil war" reads more like "Background", and the second paragraph reads like "End of Conflict". The single-sentence third paragraph 'The war is said to have been bloody; Davies writes of "much slaughter", and Sobczak notes that "entire clans perished in it".' seems rather inadequate as a description of the military activities. What made this war so "bloody"? Was there a massacre somewhere half-way through the war? I'm inclined to reject the article on WP:DYKRN#R3. Can more be added to the wikipage, please? --PFHLai (talk) 20:19, 16 November 2013 (UTC)