Template:Did you know nominations/Helen Foster Snow

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Helen Foster Snow

5x expanded by JAGrace (BYU) (talk). Self-nominated at 19:06, 1 December 2016 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Well done! 5x expansion verified. New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. The first hook is the least hooky of the 3, so I struck it. The second hook is interesting and cited inline to an offline source, so it's AGF, but it doesn't give any indication of this remarkable woman's life. ALT2 is the best, but it's not written this way in the article; the article doesn't say anything about the history being valuable, and makes it sound like Mao was giving the information to Helen for the first time, not saying it for the first time. Perhaps you can tweak this based on the offline source and get back to me. I went through the article and added "citation needed" tags to statements that need verification. I also added a "clarification needed" tag to the lead to find out which Chinese revolution you're talking about; maybe you could link that. QPQ done. Yoninah (talk) 22:28, 15 January 2017 (UTC)
  • Thank you for your notes! I understand how ALT2 can be read as ambiguous. I have added another source to this hook for further clarification. The added source states that information available to the Chinese people regarding the party's history was limited as Communist leaders did not want to glorify themselves as heroes. I have written several other hooks that may be easier to understand. I will also work on the adding the citations necessary to the article.
  • ALT3:... that Chinese Communist leader Mao Zedong divulged the Communist party's previously unknown history to American journalist Helen Foster Snow in 1937 for widespread publication?
  • ALT4:... that Inside Red China by American journalist Helen Foster Snow contains information from her interviews with Mao Zedong about the previously unknown history of the Chinese Communist Party?
  • ALT5:...that American journalist Helen Foster Snow published the previously unknown history of the Chinese Communist party as told to her by Mao Zedong in her book Inside Red China? Sources: Billingsley, Dodge. Helen Foster Snow: Witness to Revolution. Heath, Harvard. Register of the Helen Foster Snow Collection: Biographical History. JAGrace (BYU) (talk) 17:51, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
  • Template:Ping, I didn't see that you made any edits to the article. After you add the source to the article and fix the tags, I will proceed with this review. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 06:59, 18 January 2017 (UTC)