Template:Did you know nominations/I Love You Colonel Sanders!

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I Love You Colonel Sanders!

  • Reviewed: Exempt, less than 5 DYKs in my life

Created/expanded by Akrabbim (talk). Self-nominated at 20:33, 4 February 2020 (UTC).

  • Symbol delete vote.svg Unless I'm missing something, this was last edited on 15 December 2019, and submitted to DYK on 4 February 2020‎, so it fails the newness criteria of WP:DYKRULES. -- RoySmith (talk) 03:56, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
Oh, no, wait. I was reviewing the wrong article. I was looking at Colonel Sanders, not I Love You Colonel Sanders!. -- RoySmith (talk) 03:58, 6 February 2020 (UTC)

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  • Symbol question.svg This hook falls short of Rule C6. It is all plot. Please provide a new hook. Yoninah (talk) 21:34, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
  • I just looked over the article. While it is true that Colonel Sanders is a real-life person, the hook is written in a way that obscures that. A tweak of the hook wording would solve it. Alternately, the bolded link could be piped to say what it is (a dating sim). Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 21:37, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
Hmm, how about this? —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 21:48, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
  • OK, but what about removing the repetition?
  • ALT2: ... that the young, attractive, and date-able portrayal of Colonel Sanders in a parody dating sim is part of an effort by KFC to make the Colonel a "part of pop culture"? Yoninah (talk) 21:58, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
  • You could also turn around the wording in ALT0:
  • ALT0a: ... that in a 2019 parody dating sim commissioned by KFC, players attempt to win the love of the young, attractive Colonel Sanders? Yoninah (talk) 22:03, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
I don't see how ALT2 is an improvement over ALT1, but I'm fine with it if you think it's better. I think it's hookier than ALT0 and 0a. —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 22:07, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
  • I'm a newbie when it comes to DYK (and particularly DYK reviews). With that in mind, it seems kind of wordy to me. How about:
  • ALT2a: ... that the young, attractive, and date-able Colonel Sanders in a parody dating sim is part of an effort by KFC to make him a "part of pop culture"? -- RoySmith (talk) 23:38, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
  1. REDIRECT Template:outdent It doesn't make it that much shorter and I think it loses a little clarity, so I think I prefer ALT2 to 2a. —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 14:06, 12 February 2020 (UTC)
  • I agree, ALT2 is clearer. Yoninah (talk) 15:31, 12 February 2020 (UTC)