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I Love You Colonel Sanders!
... that players attempt to win the love of the young, attractive Colonel Sanders in I Love You Colonel Sanders!?Source: "Things got even weirder when the game was revealed to be a dating simulator with Colonel Sanders as the prized companion." ("I played KFC's bizarre Colonel Sanders dating game so you don't have to")
- Reviewed: Exempt, less than 5 DYKs in my life
Created/expanded by Akrabbim (talk). Self-nominated at 20:33, 4 February 2020 (UTC).
Unless I'm missing something, this was last edited on 15 December 2019, and submitted to DYK on 4 February 2020, so it fails the newness criteria of WP:DYKRULES. -- RoySmith (talk) 03:56, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
- Oh, no, wait. I was reviewing the wrong article. I was looking at Colonel Sanders, not I Love You Colonel Sanders!. -- RoySmith (talk) 03:58, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
Lua error: expandTemplate: template "y" does not exist.
This hook falls short of Rule C6. It is all plot. Please provide a new hook. Yoninah (talk) 21:34, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- I just looked over the article. While it is true that Colonel Sanders is a real-life person, the hook is written in a way that obscures that. A tweak of the hook wording would solve it. Alternately, the bolded link could be piped to say what it is (a dating sim). Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 21:37, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- Hmm, how about this? —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 21:48, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- ALT1:
... that the young, attractive, and date-able portrayal of Colonel Sanders in I Love You Colonel Sanders! is part of an effort by KFC to make the Colonel a "part of pop-culture"?
- OK, but what about removing the repetition?
- ALT2: ... that the young, attractive, and date-able portrayal of Colonel Sanders in a parody dating sim is part of an effort by KFC to make the Colonel a "part of pop culture"? Yoninah (talk) 21:58, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- You could also turn around the wording in ALT0:
- ALT0a:
... that in a 2019 parody dating sim commissioned by KFC, players attempt to win the love of the young, attractive Colonel Sanders?Yoninah (talk) 22:03, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- I don't see how ALT2 is an improvement over ALT1, but I'm fine with it if you think it's better. I think it's hookier than ALT0 and 0a. —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 22:07, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
Well, ALT1 has the word Template:Tq three times and Template:Tq twice. ALT2 has two Template:Tq and one Template:Tq :) Pinging Template:Ping to review ALT2. Yoninah (talk) 22:20, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- I'm a newbie when it comes to DYK (and particularly DYK reviews). With that in mind, it seems kind of wordy to me. How about:
- ALT2a: ... that the young, attractive, and date-able Colonel Sanders in a parody dating sim is part of an effort by KFC to make him a "part of pop culture"? -- RoySmith (talk) 23:38, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- I don't see how ALT2 is an improvement over ALT1, but I'm fine with it if you think it's better. I think it's hookier than ALT0 and 0a. —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 22:07, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- ALT1:
- Hmm, how about this? —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 21:48, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- REDIRECT Template:outdent It doesn't make it that much shorter and I think it loses a little clarity, so I think I prefer ALT2 to 2a. —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 14:06, 12 February 2020 (UTC)