Template:Did you know nominations/Janabiyah

Janabiyah

• ( Back to T:TDYK
• Article history )

• ... that the village of Janabiyah in Bahrain is home to hundreds of prehistoric burial mounds and that artefacts obtained from excavations show that the Dilmun civilisation of Bahrain engaged in trading with the Indus Valley civilisation?

Created/expanded by Droodkin (talk). Self nom at 07:57, 27 August 2012 (UTC)

16px There are a two issues with the nomination:

1. The hook is 233 characters - it needs to be shortened to a maximum of 200
2. There are significant similarities between the article and the main source and it will therefore need a rewrite to avoid such close paraphrasing/copying

While the first issue is easy to fix it might take too long to rewrite the article but some time could be allowed. violet/riga _^[talk] 03:08, 30 August 2012 (UTC)

Okay, I've edited the article and reworded it. As for making a revised hook:

• ALT1... that the village of Janabiyah in Bahrain is home to hundreds of prehistoric burial mounds which were built during the Dilmun era of Bahraini history?

--Droodkin (talk) 10:56, 30 August 2012 (UTC)

That hook is better but I'm still a little uncomfortable with closeness of the paraphrasing - changing the order of words in a list and using synonyms might not be enough of a rewrite. violet/riga _^[talk] 19:01, 31 August 2012 (UTC)

I've done some more editing, it should be alright now. --Droodkin (talk) 12:26, 17 September 2012 (UTC)

• 16px alright. I tweaked a couple more to distance from the sourcing, and I think we can greenlight this. Tried to twaek as much as possible without compromising meaning. Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:12, 19 September 2012 (UTC)