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Long March (Pakistan)

Created by Lihaas (talk). Self nom at 06:58, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

Note- its on ITNC, but im pretty suer it wont get on since it hasnt had a comment yet. If it does ill withdraw this.Lihaas (talk) 06:59, 19 January 2013 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Every paragraph should have a least one reference, also the article is taged with "clarification needed" template. Zia Khan 17:05, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
Its over-reffing? But done.Lihaas (talk) 01:12, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
Symbol redirect vote4.png First paragraph of "Background" is still unreferenced, I'd like another user to review the article. Thanks, Zia Khan 15:03, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
DoneLihaas (talk) 07:56, 3 February 2013 (UTC)
Symbol possible vote.svg QPQ fine, article eligible (created Jan 15, nom Jan 19). The prose is of acceptable quality but would benefit from a specialist copyedit. However, I do have some concerns. Firstly, the spelling of M(u/o)hammed is inconsistent between the hook and the article. Secondly, the article does not actually say that Tahir-ul-Qadri signed the declaration, only that the government did. Thirdly, the hook is rather boring and could more usefully pick up on some other fact relevant to the declaration. I look forward to rereviewing the article shortly (do feel free to talkback me). Thanks, - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 13:22, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
Done first 2, no probs on anyother hook submission?Lihaas (talk) 18:50, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
ALT1:
Also, upon rereading the prose I think it does need some work, so I've requested a check for the WP:GOCE, though we'll have to see if that review is forthcoming. I will check for sourcing shortly before giving you the tick. - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 20:28, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
All sourced added as i did the additions and took from the source.
Not sure what copy edit is needed. Can yuo pt out instances so i can do it?Lihaas (talk) 07:31, 11 February 2013 (UTC)
Well, not to put too fine a point on it, the whole thing really needs a copyedit; it's nothing personal, it's just that it comes across as awkward to me (as a native English speaker).
Having looked at the sourcing, though, I have some concerns there. For example, paragraph 2 of Reactions (beginning with "

Government of Punjab Minister for Law Rana Sanaullah said that people..."), including a direct quotation, is cited to reference 4, but that source does not mention Rana Sanaullah, nor does it post-date the march. Is this an isolated case, or will I find that ll the way through? - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 22:58, 11 February 2013 (UTC)