Template:Did you know nominations/Martin Selig

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Martin Selig

Columbia Center, Seattle
Columbia Center, Seattle
  • Reviewed: Oxbow Inlet
  • Comment: one day late, but it is a good hook

Created by Edwardx (talk). Self-nominated at 12:04, 12 December 2015 (UTC).

Symbol question.svg Interesting life, on good sources, and a good sourced hook! Please go over the article. There are too many sentences running for too long (for my taste), please split instead of connecting by "and". Take the one about him and his father, - I am not sure I know what is about him and what about his father. I think at least one word is missing later, in "so they his in warehouses", - another sentence that could be split in three or four ;) I would not mention "Jewish" in parantheses,asit's the key element. - The image is good and licensed. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:52, 14 December 2015 (UTC)
ps: I don't mind the day late, but please tell us a bit about how he made the money to build the tower. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:55, 14 December 2015 (UTC)
Thank you for your constructive comments. I've added quite a bit more content and done some copyediting. I hope you will find the revised article clearer and more detailed, but I'm struggling to fill in all the gaps as to how he really made so much money! Edwardx (talk) 11:13, 17 December 2015 (UTC)
Thank you, much better! Chronology:didn't Manfred first land in Seattle, then open a shop? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 13:04, 17 December 2015 (UTC)
And thank you, Gerda Arendt. I have rearranged the events to fit the correct chronological order. And I've done a QPQ review. Edwardx (talk) 13:49, 17 December 2015 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg thanks, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 13:58, 17 December 2015 (UTC)