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Nakamura Satoru
- ... that Nakamura Satoru (pictured) was the son of a samurai?
Created by MChew (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 12:37, 23 February 2014 (UTC).
- 2829 characters of prose - long enough

- seems neutral

- some chunks of text lack inline citations

- Dupuy quoted as a reference but not used in inline citations

- offline sources are unverifiable - AGF

- hook - short enough, interesting & neutral

- QPQ not required

- image - PD, used in article, shows up well in small

- Just some citations to sort out... --Gibmetal 77talk 2 me 00:02, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
- Ah yes. I asked the article creator if the book reference references all the text above it. I am still waiting for a reply. Thanks, Matty.007 17:07, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
- Perhaps I'm missing something obvious, but I do not find this hook interesting. It is not at all surprising to me that a Japanese man in an old-looking military uniform might have been the son of a samurai -- and without the image there would nothing here of interest at all. The hook gives me no reason to want to read about this man. Is there something interesting about the son of a samurai becoming an officer in the early Imperial Japanese Army? Perhaps a different hook could be written about his military experience, for example:
- ALT1: ... that Nakamura Satoru (pictured) was wounded and lost most of his men in forlorn hope assaults on Russian fortifications during the Siege of Port Arthur? --Orlady (talk) 20:34, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
- I guess 'interestingness' is subjective... I think samurais are super cool and will always attract my attention. The original hook leaves me wanting to know more and I'd probably be more likely to click on the article than with ALT1. But that's just me
--Gibmetal 77talk 2 me 00:05, 27 February 2014 (UTC)
- Perhaps I'm missing something obvious, but I do not find this hook interesting. It is not at all surprising to me that a Japanese man in an old-looking military uniform might have been the son of a samurai -- and without the image there would nothing here of interest at all. The hook gives me no reason to want to read about this man. Is there something interesting about the son of a samurai becoming an officer in the early Imperial Japanese Army? Perhaps a different hook could be written about his military experience, for example:
- Ah yes. I asked the article creator if the book reference references all the text above it. I am still waiting for a reply. Thanks, Matty.007 17:07, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
Repeating the most severe of the icons used in the above review, since the software assumes the final icon is the one that holds. Gibmetal, for future reference, it's best only to use a single icon in your review—using many makes it hard for promoters to figure out what's up—but if you do use many, please also use a summary icon at the end that shows the overall status. Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:39, 27 February 2014 (UTC)
- Template:Ping thanks for the advice and apologies for the confusion. --Gibmetal 77talk 2 me 23:35, 27 February 2014 (UTC)
