Template:Did you know nominations/Peter Addyman

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Peter Addyman

Source: Bell 2008: "Dr Peter Addyman, the former director of York Archaeological Trust, officially collected the title of Honorary Freeman at a ceremony at the Mansion House on Wednesday. The title now means he can drive three sheep across Ouse Bridge or graze three beasts on York's Knavesmire."

5x expanded by Usernameunique (talk). Self-nominated at 01:19, 12 March 2018 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg - someone else will have to count the characters, but by eye this expansion looks like it should be enough to me on x5 expansion and 1,500 length. Seems neutral, and there are citations which seem to support the content, but I can't read Who's Who, which is marked as free access but requires a subscription. I did not spot any copyright or plagiarism problems, but it is a slightly unsatisfactory read: frankly, it gives the impression of "painting by numbers", pulling together disparate facts from different sources without much sense of a narrative structure. Your recent article on Dominic Tweddle is so much better. My fault, no doubt, but for example, I'd probably start with his birth, rather than putting it near the end, and then work through chronologically, from his education (why is that in the lead section?) through his career, to his latest exploits. Not sure why the article needs to mention three random other people who are Honorary Freeman of the City of York. Some of the cited sources mention more details of relevance that could be added, such as his service on various advisory committees. And he was one of four people awarded the British Academy's President's Medal in 2015, and it would more relevant to mention the fellow medal winners than a random peace campaigner or opera singer who also has (rarely exercised) rights to drive sheep over a bridge. No link for the Malton Museum - perhaps Malton, North Yorkshire? Does he have any more publications worth mentioning? For example [1]. Would the hook be more interesting if it mentioned his fellow 2015 medal winners, Darren Henley, Elizabeth Livingstone, or Michael Wood? (Oh, look, a "Woman In Red" right there. Here is a starter for ten: "independent scholar...editorial work on successive editions of The Oxford Dictionary of the Christian Church". Almost inevitably, we have an article on her co-editor, Frank Leslie Cross.) Sorry, that was probably not the review you were looking for. Theramin (talk) 02:28, 12 March 2018 (UTC)