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• ... that Peter Austin built some 140 breweries in 17 countries?

• Reviewed: Hasculf de Tany

Created by Edwardx (talk). Self nominated at 23:43, 4 February 2014 (UTC).

• 16px Date, length OK. The hook is too exact; the source says he built "some 140 breweries". Perhaps add "about" or "some" to the hook. And the stub tag should be removed. I cannot find a reference to the two sentences ending in "Gordon Brown" - I guess this is because the article is still being expanded, but if it's to appear on the main page, this should be covered and the in use tag to disappear, at least for the present. --Peter I. Vardy (talk) 15:51, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• Thank you for your helpful comments. I was trying to keep the hook short, but I agree that adding "some" is a worthwhile improvement. And I've added two references to that section. I've also removed the under constrcution and stub tags. Edwardx (talk) 17:56, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• 16px Thanks for the improvements and references. All OK now. --Peter I. Vardy (talk) 18:19, 5 February 2014 (UTC)