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Pombo Musical
... that Pombo Musical is a compilation of poems and fables done musical album?
- ALT1:... that Pombo Musical is a children's album that mixes rock and Colombian folk genres?
- ALT2:... that Pombo Musical won a Latin Grammy as Best Latin Children's Album in 2008?
Created by Luisnh1210 (talk). Self nominated at 05:12, 6 January 2015 (UTC).
- Reviewed:
The article length, date of expansion and copyvio check all are fine. Hooks are appropriately cited. Both hooks are interesting.--Miguelemejia (talk) 21:14, 6 January 2015 (UTC)
The original hook doesn't make sense. Is it supposed to be "done as a musical album" or something like that? MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 22:04, 6 January 2015 (UTC)
- I don't see the ambiguity. If you talk about Madonna's album what can of album do you think they are talking to? of course is a musical album; hence the title Pombo Musical. I like the the first hook over the second alternative since the first hook makes reference to the title and the poems of Rafael Pombo that inspire it.--Miguelemejia (talk) 19:13, 7 January 2015 (UTC)
Your inability to see that the hook as written doesn't make sense made me wonder about how closely you perused the article. After just a quick glance, I see that the article is in desperate need of copyediting. The very first sentence is a mess. After seeing that, I skipped to the first sentence of the second paragraph, which is even worse. It's barely comprehensible: "After the finish the promotion of his last studio album El Rock de Mi Pueblo (2004), Carlos Vives finish his discographic contract with EMI Latin, fact that motivates to take a hiatus of his career and decide to concentrate in support to local artists and follow his career as producer and songwriter." I looked at a few other random sentences, which were about as bad, and I couldn't stand to read any more. They were enough to determine that the article in its current state is not ready to be linked to from the Main Page. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 12:29, 8 January 2015 (UTC)
- Template:Reply to I'm not involved in this article but have done quick copyedit of it. I do have to disclose that I don't understand Spanish so article creators are free to revert if I wrote something wrong. Hope that helps. Also an alternate hook:
- ALT3:... that the children's album Pombo Musical is based on fables written by Colombian poet Rafael Pombo? Cowlibob (talk) 19:40, 8 January 2015 (UTC)
- Template:Reply to I'm not involved in this article but have done quick copyedit of it. I do have to disclose that I don't understand Spanish so article creators are free to revert if I wrote something wrong. Hope that helps. Also an alternate hook:
Full review needed now that article has been copyedited; also, struck original hook (ungrammatical), leaving ALTs to be checked in review. BlueMoonset (talk) 23:39, 31 January 2015 (UTC)