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Sakura-Variationen
Lachenmann in 2017
Lachenmann in 2017
- ... that Helmut Lachenmann (pictured) composed Sakura-Variationen for a children's concert, a trio for saxophone, piano and percussion, based on a Japanese song about the cherry blossom? Sources: several
- Reviewed: Shepherd's Pipe Carol
Created by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self-nominated at 22:07, 4 December 2018 (UTC).
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Just to say, hook is not very 'hooky' because of the assorted non-key info it contains - also ' about the cherry blossom' is not quite idiomatic English - why not just
- ALT1 ... that Helmut Lachenmann (pictured) composed Sakura-Variationen based on a Japanese song about cherry blossom?
- My personal feeling is that this is neater, I'm not strenuously objecting. Best, Smerus (talk) 11:13, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for offering, - neater - no doubt, but why drop the rather unusual scoring, and the children, which probably made him write a rather accessible piece for a change. Hosokawa also used the cherry blossom song, probably others as well, - I always try to say something unique for the person. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:10, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- I edited the lead to sort out all those clauses. I suggest writing the hook this way:
- ALT0a: ... that Helmut Lachenmann (pictured) composed Sakura-Variationen, a trio for saxophone, piano, and percussion based on a Japanese folk song about the cherry blossom, for a children's concert? Yoninah (talk) 20:54, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
- fine with me --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:54, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for offering, - neater - no doubt, but why drop the rather unusual scoring, and the children, which probably made him write a rather accessible piece for a change. Hosokawa also used the cherry blossom song, probably others as well, - I always try to say something unique for the person. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:10, 15 December 2018 (UTC)