Template:Did you know nominations/Saradha Group financial scandal
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Saradha Group financial scandal
- ... that Saradha Group financial scandal is possibly the biggest ponzi collapse in India?
Created/expanded by Legaleagle86 (talk). Self nominated at 10:48, 1 May 2013 (UTC).
- ALT1: ... that a 10% tax on tobacco was imposed to create a fund for investors bankrupted by Saradha Group financial scandal?
I like your hook but this fact needs inline citation for DYK (see Hook Content rule 3). -SusanLesch (talk) 00:36, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
- Added reference for the largest ponzi scam in India from website ponzitracker. [1], the 10% tax hook was already referenced in the article [2]. LegalEagle (talk) 10:22, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
First hook. Please correct the article to use the source. It does not say this is the biggest Ponzi scheme in the history of India. It says, "If true, the scheme would be not only one of the largest schemes in India, but would rank as one of the largest in history." Second hook. Please reword the article. Currently the sentence about this tax is way too close paraphrasing of its source (it appears to be a direct quote). -SusanLesch (talk) 14:51, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
- Added reference for the largest ponzi scam in India from website ponzitracker. [1], the 10% tax hook was already referenced in the article [2]. LegalEagle (talk) 10:22, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
- Used the word 'potentially' to emphasise that the amount lost is still speculative, paraphrased the tax sentence a bit more, pls do let me know if this suffices.LegalEagle (talk) 15:10, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
Yes, thank you, the sentence about the tax is better (even though its sentence structure still closely follows the source). But for your first hook you will need to add a source for the rest of the sentence: "front-page news nationally and internationally" which is a claim you are making out of thin air. Also the next sentence has no source: "After a massive manhunt, Sudipto Sen, Debjani Mukhopadhdhay, and Arvind Singh Chauhan were arrested in Sonmarg, Kashmir on 23 April 2013." How can you write an article about a current event without sources? -SusanLesch (talk) 19:31, 5 May 2013 (UTC)