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Shaun Brisley
- ... that professional footballer Shaun Brisley credited his vegan diet with improving his fitness? "Shaun Brisley has revealed how turning vegan has played a part in his brilliant form for Notts County"
- Reviewed: Georgies
Improved to Good Article status by EchetusXe (talk). Self-nominated at 15:42, 2 November 2020 (UTC).
- Seeing a comment was made on 3 November but not a full review, I will conduct a full review (though I agree with Template:U's comments about the hook)
Article is long enough (7259 characters), is a GA, nominated in time (became GA on 1 November, nominated on 2 November), and article is within policy
As highlighted above, a hook that a vegan thinks veganism has helped them is uninteresting, as it's very common for vegans to post support for veganism. Please can you provide a more interesting hook?
QPQ done
Template:U Overall, the article is good (no pun intended!), but the hook is not. Joseph2302 (talk) 10:27, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
- I have to say that there aren't many vegan footballers. How about we just change the hook to state that he became vegan and not mention the fitness quote?EchetusXe 13:31, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
- There are quite a few famous vegan footballers ([1], [2], [3]), and I just don't see how someone being vegan is that interesting of a hook. Joseph2302 (talk) 18:07, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
- Okay I'll have to reach a bit for something interesting with this otherwise rather ordinary footballer. But reading again through the article this angle stood out for me:
- There are quite a few famous vegan footballers ([1], [2], [3]), and I just don't see how someone being vegan is that interesting of a hook. Joseph2302 (talk) 18:07, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
- ... that professional footballer Shaun Brisley scored for Peterborough United in the 2014 Football League Trophy Final after having initially turned down a move to the club due to him feeling homesick? "We had Shaun here three years ago because we were aware of his potential then, but he was homesick and didn`t fancy coming" cup final EchetusXe 20:44, 24 November 2020 (UTC)