Template:Did you know nominations/Šime Budinić

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Šime Budinić

Created by Antidiskriminator (talk). Self-nominated at 23:57, 24 May 2015 (UTC).

  • Struck ALT0 as somewhat unintelligible. I can kind of understand what it's trying to say but not really, so I can't fix it. EEng (talk) 05:23, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

Template:U, What do you think about ALT1?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 07:15, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

Well, "penetrate as much South Slavs as possible" makes no sense, and the article says the same thing so I just don't know what to tell you to do. I think you need to find a native English speaker to copyedit the article for you, and then reconsider the hook. The nomination can go on hold while you get this done. EEng (talk) 22:32, 27 May 2015 (UTC)
  • ALT2:
Template:U, thanks for advice which I followed (diff) and requested copy editing at GOCE. What do you think about ALT2?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 06:18, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

Why don't you ping me when the copyedit is done and we'll think about hooks then. EEng (talk) 12:08, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

Ok. --Antidiskriminator (talk) 12:36, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

I came over at the request of Template:U. How about this:

Still a bit clunky, but I think it is definitely an improvement over the original. If you think it still needs further tweaking, let me know. -Pax Verbum 21:23, 16 June 2015 (UTC)

Template:U, thank you for your effort. It is necessary to correct one thing. Cyrillic and Glagolitic which were not derived from Czech diacritics. Based on the Cyrillic and Glagolitic, Budinic created a version of Latin script which included a few Czech diacritics. To simplify things it might be a good idea to drop Czech diacritics and tweak ALT3 to be something like:
What do you think?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 21:54, 16 June 2015 (UTC)