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Argus Retinal Prosthesis

Created by Michaelmas1957 (talk). Self nominated at 09:16, 18 February 2013 (UTC).

  • As an outside comment of a possible issue, you may want to read WP:MEDRS. There was a fluff-up with a hook about an exoskeleton a few months back, and this may have similar issues as it is on the fence between a medical article and about a product. Chris857 (talk) 18:01, 19 February 2013 (UTC)
Mmmmm. I can see the issues now. Sources aren't too specialised as well. Articles do relate that product can only help with a specific condition, and only then improve slightly. Gareth E Kegg (talk) 22:33, 19 February 2013 (UTC)
Suggest some improvements and I'll get to work on them. – Michaelmas1957 (talk) 10:43, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
  • Comment - Perhaps the nominator should try asking at this project; I'm told they are very helpful. SagaciousPhil - Chat 11:10, 22 March 2013 (UTC)
  • Good point Phil - I have mentioned this nomination there. --Demiurge1000 (talk) 21:04, 31 March 2013 (UTC)

Comment Why is the title all caps? Other concerns include the fact that it is primarily supported by refs to the manufacturers website and the popular press. Also it is a little too promotional for my liking. For example the article states "The Argus II is primarily designed to treat sufferers of retinitis pigmentosa, a genetic ocular disease which affects approximately 1.5 million people worldwide" however the device is only approved for "adults with severe retinitis pigmentosa" by the FDA [1]. I am not sure what proportion have severe disease but it would be less than 1.5 million. There are WP:MEDMOS issues. Disagree that "Following years of testing" is proper encyclopdic tone. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 21:49, 31 March 2013 (UTC)