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Beatrice Kerr

Beatrice Kerr

  • ... that while performing as "Australia's Champion Lady Swimmer and Diver", Beatrice Kerr (pictured) saved two Blackpool boys from drowning?
  • Comment: Not a self nomination

Created/expanded by IgnorantArmies (talk). Nominated by Allen3 (talk) at 20:50, 25 October 2012 (UTC)

  • Symbol confirmed.svg - Length, date, sourcing, hook all check. 69.237.151.243 (talk) 12:59, 26 October 2012 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svgSymbol redirect vote4.png While new reviewers are warmly welcomed, I think it's a good idea that a review that's the second edit by a new user be rechecked prior to final approval. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:22, 27 October 2012 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg There are couple things that would be nice to see before this article hits the main page, mostly involving the the lead. First, the lead could use a little WP:MOS work and some paragraph break. Right now it looks a little jumbled with several awkward sentences. Also, while WP:LEAD states that not everything in the section needs to have a reference citation there is one strong claim involving the challenges to Annette Kellerman that certainly merits a citation. One of the refs, from the Australian Dictionary of Biography, looks like it would suffice and I noticed there is a lot of material in that source that is not included in the article. I would encourage the author or nominator to take another look at that ref since some of that missing material could be fruitful for a more "punchier" hook such as Ms. Kerr's "Flying Honey Pot" maneuver or her "daring" 5 pound swimsuits. AgneCheese/Wine 06:19, 10 November 2012 (UTC)