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Cecile Hoover Edwards
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that Cecile Hoover Edwards graduated high school at 15, and later focused her scientific career on the amino acid composition of foods to improve the health of African-American cuisine?
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Moved to mainspace by Sisterchemist3 (talk), Antony-22 (talk), and Yoninah (talk). Nominated by Antony-22 (talk) at 00:39, 6 October 2015 (UTC).
- Ada Lovelace Day late nominee needs help to rush for Tuesday Victuallers (talk) 00:42, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Hi, I came by to review this but found the information rather scanty and only 2 refs. I added more reliable refs such as encyclopedia dictionaries, and also linked it to other Wikipedia pages so it wouldn't be an orphan. I guess I've recused myself from reviewing this, but I would appreciate a DYK creation co-credit. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 18:27, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
Good length article with good sourcing. Its neutral and I can see no paraphrasing. There was no image but I've added one but its not free. The hook above is quite complex and I couldn't clearly see the causality. However I have suggested some hooks that someone might tick.Victuallers (talk) 21:46, 27 October 2015 (UTC)
..(alt1). that the nutritionist Cecile Hoover Edwards studied people who ate things with no nutritional value?...(alt2). that Cecile Hoover Edwards tried to work out how you could get the best nutrition for your money?
- ALT1 isn't in the article, and ALT2 is boring. Yes, the original hook contains two unrelated facts, but they are much more interesting. How about this shorter version?
- ALT3:
... that nutritionist Cecile Hoover Edwards studied the amino acid composition of foods to improve the health of African-American cuisine? - ALT4:
... that the State of Illinois has declared April 5 to be "Dr. Cecile Hoover Edwards Day"? Antony–22 (talk⁄contribs) 08:53, 28 October 2015 (UTC)
Alt 4 is fine although I would add "nutritionist". So "..Illinois honored a nutritionist and declared" so that the reader knows something about her. Alt3 still suffers from lack of causality. Nice article. Cheers Victuallers (talk) 08:03, 29 October 2015 (UTC)
Template:Ping ALT4 is inaccurate; the date was only declared for April 5, 1984, not every year after that. You could say:- ALT5: ... that the State of Illinois declared April 5, 1984 to be nutritionist "Dr. Cecile Hoover Edwards Day"? Yoninah (talk) 01:59, 30 October 2015 (UTC)
The source says "In 1984 the State of Illinois declared April 5 to be 'Dr. Cecile Hoover Edwards Day.'" I'll change the article wording to reflect this.Antony–22 (talk⁄contribs) 05:27, 30 October 2015 (UTC)- Upon perusing other sources, it seems you're right. What was the problem with ALT3 anyway? What does "lack of causality" mean? Antony–22 (talk⁄contribs) 05:31, 30 October 2015 (UTC)
- ALT3: