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Di Genius

  • ... that Di Genius had his first riddim hits in Jamaica in 2004, 14 years old?
  • Reviewed: NA

Created by Strachkvas (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 14:09, 15 April 2013 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg I believe you need a new ALT hook...the current hook is grammatically incorrect and needs to be revised in order for us to continue with the review process. At this stage, it simply doesn't make sense. Proudbolsahye (talk) 07:14, 17 April 2013 (UTC)
  • Thank you for commenting on the hook, pointing out grammar problems. I have suggested two alt hooks below. Oceanh (talk) 08:46, 18 April 2013 (UTC)
  • ALT1:... that riddim composer Di Genius had his first hits in Jamaica in 2004?
  • ALT2:... that riddim composer Di Genius had his first hits in Jamaica in 2004, when he was 14 years old?
Symbol possible vote.svg ALT1 seems to be boring, but ALT2 looks fine. However, there are some other issues here. The hook is not in the article. It does say Di Genius was in high school, but doesn't state his age at the time. Ref 9 indeed backs up some artists Di Genius worked with, but not all of them. Same thing for the line about who he's collobarated with; not all artists are in the sources. Furthermore, I would like to see his birth date and place properly referenced. —♦♦ AMBER(ЯʘCK) 16:21, 30 April 2013 (UTC)
  • Hi Amber. I admit I had some trouble writing this article, as I work primarily on historical pages. I've added a few more sources and I think it covers most everything now, but let me know if there are still issues. However, I could not find a citation for Di Genius being 14 in 2004 when he composed his first hit riddim (though he probably was, having a January birthday), and thus I suggest changing the hook slightly to refer to his "Red Bull & Guiness" riddim, which is reliably sourced as being a much bigger "defining" hit and written at age 15. It depends on your definition of a hit record, which is quite arbitrary, especially in a country with no official charts. If I may be so bold, I have appended some suggestions below. —Strachkvas (talk) 18:36, 30 April 2013 (UTC)
  • ALT3:... that riddim composer Di Genius had his first hits in Jamaica in 2004, while still in high school?
  • ALT4:... that riddim composer Di Genius had his first hits in Jamaica in 2005, aged fifteen?