Template:Did you know nominations/H. J. de Graaf

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H. J. de Graaf

Created by HaEr48 (talk). Self-nominated at 06:25, 18 May 2017 (UTC).

Going to review this, but not immediately --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:02, 23 May 2017 (UTC)
16px Interesting detailed life, on good sources, JSTOR accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. The hook is interesting and a good summary. - Please go over the article for some recurring issues:
  • The last two digits of a year get repeated in constructions such as 1904–07, not only the last.
  • The name of the subject should be repeated 1) at the beginning of each section, 2) instead of "he" when it's not clear who "he" is, for example when another man is mentioned, and then you say "his wife".
  • Check that "ref" comes right after a fact, no space.
  • Check for too complicated sentences, better split.
  • If you have to mention a thing twice, like dissertation or marriage, don't repeat word by word.
  • Write more lead, please. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:37, 23 May 2017 (UTC)
Thanks, Template:Userlink. I made updates to the article to address your feedback. Let me know if there's anything further I can improve. HaEr48 (talk) 06:20, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
16px thank you! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:18, 25 May 2017 (UTC)