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Revision as of 20:37, 8 February 2014 by imported>PFHLai ({{subst:DYK?again}} Any progress here? Time for re-review, please?)
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History of Franz Josef Land
- ... that the first announced discovery of Franz Josef Land (situation pictured) was made by an expedition of 1872–74, which primary goal was to find the Northeast Passage?
- Reviewed: Not a self-nomination
Created by Arsenikk (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 06:22, 17 January 2014 (UTC).
Article requires copyediting for flow. Language sounds pretty clumsy in quite a few cases. Eg. "The vessel drifted to the for them unknown archipelago". The hook is not sourced inline but the source appears in the subsequent sentence. Locate a source here. I'm also concerned about the lay-out. There is a section entitled "Discovery" and as a DYK reader visiting the article I would expect to find the information about the discovery of the islands under this subheading. Yet the first announced discovery appears under early expeditions. Even if you want to maintain the second sub-heading I would recommend including the facts of the different claims to discovery in the "Discovery" section. Once the copyediting has been done I'll do a more thorough review. Also I would love to see a more condensed reference list. Most references are to different pages in the same book. I'll go in and make those changes. If another editor disagrees with that then he/she could always revert. Evidently the entire article relies heavily on one main source. I would love to be able to go in and check for copyvio issues but the source isn't available online. The article is quite lengthy so I would be fearful of AGF with close paraphrasing or copyvio. However, given the creator's significant contributions I would let this slide. EagerToddler39 (talk) 22:49, 24 January 2014 (UTC)
