Template:Did you know nominations/Jack Swift (athlete)

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Jack Swift (athlete)

  • Reviewed: Dock Ellis
  • Comment: Save for the Paralympics? Moved from user space.

Created/expanded by LauraHale (talk). Self nom at 09:24, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

  • Hook and content check out. Should Cleo in the article link to Cleo (magazine)? It currently links to a DAB page. I only ask this because I think it might be necessary to link it in the hook. I had no idea what the Victorian Cleo Bachelor of the Year was. After finding the magazine, I take that it is similar to GQ. In addition, he was only a finalist, so it might be better to discuss that prior to his disablement he worked as a plumber. The plumber story is interesting, but I can't think of an incredibly hooky way to say it. In any case, everything Symbol confirmed.svg checks out. I'd just like to see a thought on the lead. (You may want to create a DAB at Jack Swift while you are at it. Ryan Vesey Review me! 05:04, 24 July 2012 (UTC)
Oops. yeah. I fixed that Cleo problem. Disambigs are not my strong point. :( Hard to find interesting things in some articles. : / Lead does need to be improved a bit but hard to do when article so short. ;) --LauraHale (talk) 05:10, 24 July 2012 (UTC)