Template:Did you know nominations/John Ronald Shafto Adair

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John Ronald Shafto Adair

Created/expanded by Bonkers The Clown (talk). Self nom at 13:05, 25 December 2012 (UTC)

  • Symbol question.svg Sources are OK, length is (just about) OK and date is fine, but what I'm not getting from this article is what makes this guy notable. This source talks about him being an "aviation pioneer", which I don't see reflected anywhere in the article. What did he do that was pioneering? I'd suggest fleshing the article out a bit more to cover that and to come up with a revised hook that would be, if I may say so, a bit more interesting. Prioryman (talk) 00:34, 27 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Guy got an OBE, founded an airline, served the Great War, surely that's notable. I wouldn't mind if you suggest a more interesting hook. You're welcome to do so. But thanks for the advice, I'll try to "flesh" out more. Cheers. Bonkers The Clown (Nonsensical Babble) 03:56, 27 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Yep, looks good to me. (How the heck does an engine manage to fall out of a plane??) Prioryman (talk) 12:53, 27 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg I like the revised hook a lot, too, but the key sentence (about the engine falling out) does not have an inline source immediately after it, which is a DYK requirement. Can you please add the source citation to the end of that sentence? Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:57, 28 December 2012 (UTC)
Sure thing, done! I didn't cite it immediately after as I thought it would be understood that one source cites two sentences. But since its a requirement, its your call then. Cheers. Bonkers The Clown (Nonsensical Babble) 05:09, 28 December 2012 (UTC)