Template:Did you know nominations/Lawrence Minard

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Lawrence Minard

Created by Websurfer2 (talk). Self-nominated at 01:47, 17 April 2019 (UTC).

  • Doing... -Nizil (talk) 05:09, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg Template:Ping, thank you for your interest in DYK. I see that it is your first DYK. The article has just one issue to be resolved and it will receive the approval. The article is new, long enough, neutral and within policy and cited. Hook is OK and cited. The editor is new to DYK so no QPQ is required. I have removed "award winning" from lede as per MOS:PUFF. Only one issue remains: Template:Tq This sentence is very close to its sources (borderline copyvio). Can you reword it? -Nizil (talk) 05:37, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
Template:Ping I changed the wording. I would love to flesh-out that paragraph with more detail, but info is hard to come by. Websurfer2 (talk) 07:29, 20 April 2019 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg Template:Ping Thanks for reword. Congratulations, I am approving your first DYK. Keep contributing more to DYK and Wikipedia. Regards,-Nizil (talk) 17:30, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg While the hook is fine, it probably could be better. Considering that his claim to fame (other than the award) was working for Forbes, it doesn't seem right to not mention that somewhere in a hook. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 01:17, 25 April 2019 (UTC)
Template:Re The hook is a teaser to get someone to click on the link. Mentioning Forbes gives away the entire lede. Websurfer2 (talk) 22:31, 25 April 2019 (UTC)
Speaking as an outsider, I'm not really sure if that is really the case. I won't click on it unless I had an idea of who this Minard person is or why he is important. Teaser hooks can and do work but I personally don't think this is such a circumstance. Template:Ping Thoughts? Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:04, 26 April 2019 (UTC)
Well, I found original hook interesting enough. But people may feel differently. I propose an alternative here. What do you both think? -Nizil (talk) 14:03, 26 April 2019 (UTC)
ALT1: that Lawrence Minard won the Business Journalist of the Year award twice while working at the Forbes Global?
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg New reviewer needed to give opinion on ALT1 hook and whether the original hook was interesting enough. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:21, 16 May 2019 (UTC)