Template:Did you know nominations/Leslie Garland Bolling

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Leslie Garland Bolling

Moved to mainspace by SBaker43 (talk). Self nominated at 23:59, 27 January 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg On hold, pending some issues with paraphrasing and sourcing All issues resolved:
  • ☑Y New enough – nominated less than an hour after being moved from userspace.
  • ☑Y Long enough – 4680 characters (789 words) "readable prose".
  • Template:Qmark Mostly within policy – neutral and cites sources with at least one inline citation per paragraph except the third paragraph of the "Early life" section. Template:Y
  • Template:Warnsign the article appears to be mostly free of copyright and close paraphrasing, there are three places that need immediate attention:
  • The most serious is the last paragraph of the "Artistic work" section where "both alain locke and james a porter included bolling in their published surveys of african american art in his 1940 book design and figure carving e j tangerman discussed bolling at length and included illustrations of ten of his works as examples of american folk carving" is a word-for-word duplicate of "http://www.lva.virginia.gov/exhibits/bolling/recognition.asp". See the report for more details. I have temporarily commented out the phrases in the article. Template:Y
  • The slightly less serious matter is the wording of the last section, "List of sculptures", which has close paraphrasing of two sources; the article uses the words "In 2006 the Library of Virginia could locate only 30 of his sculptures". which compare closely to the words used in the cited source "http://www.lva.virginia.gov/news/newsltr/issue174.pdf" - "So far the Library has located 30 Bolling wood sculptures". It could be rephrased like this: "In 2006, the Library of Virginia was able to account for just 30 of his wood sculptures"? Template:Y Changed as suggested.
  • Then there is the list of carvings which could use alternative wording to avoid matching the list in the ninth paragraph of "http://www.nathanielturner.com/lesliegarlandbollingsandralwest.htm". The comparison below shows the Wikipedia article words first and then the words from NathanielTurner.com:
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  • Aunt Monday washing clothes on wash-day Monday → "Aunt Monday" (washing clothes) Template:Y
  • Sister Tuesday ironing clothes → "Sister Tuesday" (ironing) Template:Y
  • Mama-on-Wednesday mending wear and tear → "Mama-on-Wednesday" (mending) Template:Y
  • Gossip-on-Thursday visiting neighbors over the back fence on the servant's day off → "Gossip-on-Thursday" (visiting over the back fence) Template:Y
  • Cousin-on-Friday scrubbing the floor → "Cousin-on-Friday" (scrubbing the floor) Template:Y
  • Cooking-on-Saturday is a turkey going in the oven for Sunday dinner → "Cooking-on-Saturday", with a turkey going in the oven Template:Y
  • Save America is a rare political statement by him about democracy from 1941 → a rare political statement for democracy in "Save America" (1941) Template:Y
  • ☑Y The hook has 154 characters, and is interesting, neutral and present in the article.
  • Template:Qmark The hook does not have an associated citation in the article, although one could be selected from the citations already used.
  • ALT1 and ALT2 are 119 and 137 characters respectively and supported by citations but they are not as interesting as the hook or ALT3.
  • ALT3 is 155 characters and is as interesting as the hook. It has the added advantage of two reliable citations. I would suggest a possible rephrasing - move the words "for black youth" from the end of the sentence to just after the words "art center".
  • I think the wording of the hook could be improved by using fewer words but highlighting the reason why it was an unusual event:
  • ALT4... that in 1935 the segregated Richmond Academy of Arts produced a one-man show of carvings by African-American sculptor Leslie Garland Bolling?
  • ☑Y QPQ not necessary.
  • Put on hold until issues resolved. Overall an interesting and well written article, for which I would support ALT4, followed by the original hook or ALT3. Green Giant (edits) (talk) 17:43, 9 February 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Template:Ping Thank you for the changes. I have added the same citations for the hook as the following sentence. I'm in favour of ALT4, but I will leave the choice up to User:SBaker43. Good to go otherwise. Green Giant (edits) (talk) 16:29, 10 February 2014 (UTC)
ALT4 is more concise; thanks for the suggestion. Go with it. SBaker43 (talk) 08:00, 11 February 2014 (UTC)