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Nathan Cohen (rower)

Nathan Cohen rowing

5x expanded by Epeefleche (talk). Self nominated at 20:06, 30 October 2013 (UTC).

  • The article is long enough. Expansion began on 29 October 2013, which means it is also new enough. QPQ has been done. The hook is not too long (121 characters) and is properly cited, though not immediatelly after hook assertion, but at the end of paragraph. The article contains a dozen single sentence paragraphs which inhibit the flow of the text and should be avoided per MOS:LINEBREAKS (this is just an improvement opportunity, not affecting this review). Just a thought (also without affect on the review): is it better to use past tense in case of irregular heartbeat, since he does not have all the time irregular heartbeat and also he is working with medical specialists to determine how to treat it when it occur? --Antidiskriminator (talk) 11:42, 31 October 2013 (UTC)