Template:Did you know nominations/Peel Marina

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Peel Marina

5x expanded by The C of E (talk). Self-nominated at 23:25, 3 March 2020 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The hook is a bit vague and will probably need to be expanded with additional context. Like an explanation about what makes this marina important or what kind of toxic materials are there and how they got there. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 02:02, 5 March 2020 (UTC)
  • Template:Re, I made an edit in the article (feel free to revert me), because something seemed missing from the narrative: "After concerns were raised by residents over the resulting spillage, a public meeting was called by German Parish Commissioners hoping to engender a viable solution." — Maile (talk) 23:50, 6 March 2020 (UTC)
I disagree in this particular case: there's nothing in the hook that would make readers care about why it is important that this particular marina, out of all the marinas in the world, has toxic chemicals. Something else needs to be said to get people's attention. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 03:24, 7 March 2020 (UTC)
The use of the word toxic is certainly going to grab peoples attention and make them want to click, which of course is the main aim of hooks. It is simple, honest and straightforward. Less is more. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 17:14, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
  • Hi Template:U, Narutolovehinata5 asked me for my input, so I'll suggest something else. Would something like these work?
  • ALT1 ... that when silt was removed from Peel Marina in 2015, local residents complained that it was "potentially hazardous waste", only for toxic cadmium to be found there five years later?
  • ALT2 ... that local residents complained about "potentially hazardous waste" being dredged from Peel Marina in 2015, only for toxic cadmium to be found there five years later?
epicgenius (talk) 03:41, 7 March 2020 (UTC)