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Revision as of 10:31, 16 December 2013 by imported>Moonraker (tweak comment)
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Robert Drayson
- ... that Robert Drayson, who torpedoed the auxiliary cruiser Komet (pictured), became a headmaster and was told how to run his school by one of the boys?
- Reviewed: King's Hall, Herne Bay
Created by Moonraker (talk). Self nominated at 01:26, 14 December 2013 (UTC).
Good article. Fulfills eligibility criteria - New
, long enough
, within policy
. Hook could be improved though
. Would recommend the following instead:
- ALT1: ... that when future billionaire Richard Branson left the Stowe School at the age of 16, headmaster Robert Drayson told him, "Congratulations, Branson – I predict you will either go to prison or become a millionaire"? Plot Spoiler (talk) 18:34, 14 December 2013 (UTC)
- Am disappointed this one got away on me. :-) I was just about to write a review. But I have to say I loved the 'tease' in the original hook. NinaGreen (talk) 18:38, 14 December 2013 (UTC)
- ;-) ALT1 would need someone else to approve it. I also prefer the Komet hook, but if running with the other, it could surely be pruned to Alt2 ... that Branson's headmaster predicted "You will either go to prison or become a millionaire"? Moonraker (talk) 08:14, 15 December 2013 (UTC)