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Revision as of 07:00, 25 December 2018 by imported>Cwmhiraeth (To Prep 5)
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:00, 25 December 2018 (UTC)
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Sakura-Variationen
Lachenmann in 2017
Lachenmann in 2017
... that Helmut Lachenmann (pictured) composed Sakura-Variationen for a children's concert, a trio for saxophone, piano and percussion, based on a Japanese song about the cherry blossom?Sources: several
- Reviewed: Shepherd's Pipe Carol
Created by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self-nominated at 22:07, 4 December 2018 (UTC).
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- 16px Just to say, hook is not very 'hooky' because of the assorted non-key info it contains - also ' about the cherry blossom' is not quite idiomatic English - why not just
- ALT1
... that Helmut Lachenmann (pictured) composed Sakura-Variationen based on a Japanese song about cherry blossom?
- ALT1
- My personal feeling is that this is neater, I'm not strenuously objecting. Best, Smerus (talk) 11:13, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for offering, - neater - no doubt, but why drop the rather unusual scoring, and the children, which probably made him write a rather accessible piece for a change. Hosokawa also used the cherry blossom song, probably others as well, - I always try to say something unique for the person. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:10, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- I edited the lead to sort out all those clauses. I suggest writing the hook this way:
- ALT0a: ... that Helmut Lachenmann (pictured) composed Sakura-Variationen, a trio for saxophone, piano, and percussion based on a Japanese folk song about the cherry blossom, for a children's concert? Yoninah (talk) 20:54, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
- fine with me --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:54, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
- 16px16px Thank you. Restoring tick for ALT0a, which contains one verified and one foreign-language AGF ref, both cited inline. Note to Template:U: If all the hook facts aren't verified, please do not approve the hook. In this case, however, the "Japanese folk song" is clearly cited in the title of footnote 1. ALT0a good to go. Yoninah (talk) 13:59, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for offering, - neater - no doubt, but why drop the rather unusual scoring, and the children, which probably made him write a rather accessible piece for a change. Hosokawa also used the cherry blossom song, probably others as well, - I always try to say something unique for the person. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:10, 15 December 2018 (UTC)