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Symphony No. 1 (Gottschalk)

Created by Damibaru (talk). Self-nominated at 04:11, 22 February 2016 (UTC).

Symbol question.svg Interesting piece, on good sources! The source says "probably" about the Samba, - that should "probably" go to the article and the hook. Also you can't say "is" because not the complete symphony is Samba, just the second movement. How about mentioning "monster concerts" instead? How about the image of the title page? Nice infobox! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 18:57, 25 February 2016 (UTC)
Yes, thank you, Gerda Arendt. I changed the hook to include your comments. Personally, I don't find the title page so notable for anything except something almost like a reference when talking about the symphony more id depth than a DYK. As for the monster concerts, it might be interesting, but I feel that samba music is more broad a subject than larger classical concerts, perhaps...
ALT1: ... that the second movement of Louis Moreau Gottschalk's first Symphony is historically probably the first orchestrated setting of a samba? Damibaru (talk) 21:26, 25 February 2016 (UTC)
Thank you! Please don't change a hook, because later readers may not understand the conversion ;) - I suggest to drop "historically", what other first? Then for example:
ALT2: ... that the second movement of Louis Moreau Gottschalk's first Symphony is probably the first orchestra setting of a samba?
Symbol confirmed.svg --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:44, 25 February 2016 (UTC)
Yes, this is so much better. "Historically" did feel awkward. Thanks, Damibaru (talk) 22:18, 25 February 2016 (UTC)