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Wildlife of Libya

Mon-marine mollusk Melanoides tuberculata

5x expanded by Nvvchar (talk), Dr. Blofeld (talk). Nominated by Nvvchar (talk) at 03:57, 11 March 2013 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg I haven't reviewed the article but this hook isn't sufficiently interesting. Can another one be selected? Espresso Addict (talk) 03:16, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
Mediterranean monk seal
  • Endangered is always more hooky than not endangered! The hook is over 200 characters, but a shortened version should work. Perhaps omit the coastline, which is leading to very clunky phrasing, for something like:
  • Symbol question.svg Expansion checks out. Referencing is to reliable sources, but more prolific citations would be helpful throughout. In particular, refs 2,11 do not appear to mention the Mediterranean monk seal. Also, the first paragraph under the heading Aqua fauna needs a reference. The image is a painting which is out of copyright. If it's used, then the alt text needs to state that it is a painting (with the artist), rather than a photograph. The article could do with a copy edit, as it reads rather oddly in parts and I noticed several typos. I haven't formally checked for close paraphrasing but that might be another problem, as the source sections I checked while looking to confirm the hook appeared rather similar to the article text -- though both sides are list heavy. Espresso Addict (talk) 17:37, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
  • In ref 2, in the first para under National History specific mention of Mediterranean monk seal is made. I have shifted the reference to the end of the second line of the para. The first paragraph of Aqua fauna section hes been referenced now. I have corrected the typos and also fixed unit conversions. I have tried to keep the list as small as possible. Wherever coloued sketches of birds or mammals have been posted I have now indicated the author of the sketch or painting. I have also done c/e wherever I found the sentences are odd. Since there is no specific requirement for DYK (this was mentioned by reviwer on my earlier article on wildlife) to put all species list under a Table, I have reatined it in the prose form. In earlier times when I had used the table form, I was asked to change it to prose format. I can do it both ways.--Nvvchar. 17:04, 20 March 2013 (UTC)