Template:Did you know nominations/Zhang Baifa

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Zhang Baifa

Created by Zanhe (talk). Self-nominated at 17:50, 14 August 2019 (UTC).

Initial Review:

Article:
Newness: ☑Y
Length: ☑Y - 3214 B
Copyvio Check: ☑Y - violation unlikely
Neutrality: ☑Y
Grammar: ???? - I copyedited the article and renamed the last section to "Later life and death" because "Personal life" seems redundant with the first section. Could you check to make sure the paragraph about his wife and children still belongs in that section?☑Y
Sources: Template:Yellow tick - heavy reliance on sources one and two, not a big deal

Hook:
Length: ☑Y - but I noticed its straddling 200 characters
Content: ???? - "1996 Atlanta Olympics" and "2000 Olympics" seems awkward to me. Perhaps I can suggest an ALT1, let me know how you feel about it ☑Y

Neutrality: ☑Y
Source: ☑Y
QPQ: ☑Y

Overall: Symbol question.svg Good job on the article, there are a few questions I have in the Article/grammar and Hook/content section of my review. Toreightyone (talk) 14:58, 15 August 2019 (UTC)

Template:Re Thanks for your review. I'm fine with ALT1, but added "the US" before "Congress" for clarification. I omitted the word "summer" before "Olympics" in order to keep the hook below the length limit. Since ALT1 is short enough, I have no problem with adding it back. -Zanhe (talk) 18:19, 15 August 2019 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg That works for me; everything else looks to be in order — approving for ALT1. --Toreightyone (talk) 20:03, 15 August 2019 (UTC)