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Šime Budinić

Created by Antidiskriminator (talk). Self-nominated at 23:57, 24 May 2015 (UTC).

  • Struck ALT0 as somewhat unintelligible. I can kind of understand what it's trying to say but not really, so I can't fix it. EEng (talk) 05:23, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

Template:U, What do you think about ALT1?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 07:15, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

Well, "penetrate as much South Slavs as possible" makes no sense, and the article says the same thing so I just don't know what to tell you to do. I think you need to find a native English speaker to copyedit the article for you, and then reconsider the hook. The nomination can go on hold while you get this done. EEng (talk) 22:32, 27 May 2015 (UTC)
  • ALT2:
Template:U, thanks for advice which I followed (diff) and requested copy editing at GOCE. What do you think about ALT2?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 06:18, 28 May 2015 (UTC)


Why don't you ping me when the copyedit is done and we'll think about hooks then. EEng (talk) 12:08, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

Ok. --Antidiskriminator (talk) 12:36, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

I came over at the request of Template:U. How about this:

Still a bit clunky, but I think it is definitely an improvement over the original. If you think it still needs further tweaking, let me know. -Pax Verbum 21:23, 16 June 2015 (UTC)

Template:U, thank you for your effort. It is necessary to correct one thing. Cyrillic and Glagolitic which were not derived from Czech diacritics. Based on the Cyrillic and Glagolitic, Budinic created a version of Latin script which included a few Czech diacritics. To simplify things it might be a good idea to drop Czech diacritics and tweak ALT3 to be something like:
What do you think?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 21:54, 16 June 2015 (UTC)
Template:PingAh yes, that makes more sense now, and I think your new version looks good. It is more concise... -Pax Verbum 22:20, 16 June 2015 (UTC)

If I can comment on the proposed alternatives: (A) ALT 1 does not make sense because a literary language cannot be based on an alphabet such as the Cyrillic or Glagolitic. It's a bit like saying "the English literary language is based on the Roman alphabet" - well no - the English literary language is written in the Roman alphabet, but it is based on a specific dialect or a set or dialects. Maybe what was intended is something along the lines of "the literary language was based on the štokavski-ijekavski dialect which was (or still may be) the most widely understood dialect among the South Slavs". To avoid any controversies I've deliberately used a formulation that does not delimit the dialect by reference to the Croatia, Bosnian or the Serbian languages. However it should be noted that Budinić himself called the language "slovinjski" or Slav - while in Latin and Italian publications he used the name Illyrian for the language - this was common practice among Croatian writers until the 19th century. (B) ALT 3 is not correct, because looking at the 1583 edition of Suma nauka kristijanskoga (https://books.google.com.au/books?id=Rk48AAAAcAAJ&printsec=frontcover&dq=Summa+nauka&hl=en&sa=X&ved=0CB8Q6AEwAGoVChMI4-zT4MeVxgIV6FCmCh2HPAyK#v=onepage&q&f=false) it is clear that Budinić used the Latin (latinica) ie. Roman alphabet that was traditionally used for Croatian at that time, with the addition of the letters č and ž, which can be ascribed to Czech Hussite influence. Even then, the form of the letters č and ž is not the same as the present day form. The hooks (diacritics) on top of the letters are more like commas rather than like chevrons - a clear sign of Czech usage at the time. (C) ALT 4 is not correct either, for the same reasons as ALT 3. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 202.0.15.171 (talk) 02:09, 17 June 2015 (UTC)

The ALT4 refers to his 1582 work, not 1583. Thank you Template:U.--Antidiskriminator (talk) 11:19, 17 June 2015 (UTC)